Chapter 2: Page 3 (pencils + dialog)
Here's the page as it sits Sunday morning. I'm playing with balloon tails this week as that's the single most consistent criticism I've received from people: Who the hell is talking??? My previous approach came from badly interpreted advice from a fellow comicker who said if you're drawing your panels right, your balloons don't need tails. So I had previously adopted a policy of only tailing balloons I thought needed explanation. I being too familiar with my own work, clearly have made some bad decisions in this regard and as a result confused my readers. Sorry, I'm working on that!